The trip

This week’s flash fiction is the continuing story of Brittany,Harold, and Victor. The story began two weeks ago in the piece titled  Chance Meeting.

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Photo Copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

As they waited for a table at Wolfgang Puck’s Brittany wrapped her arms around Harold’s waist. “You surprised me with this trip.”

“That was the plan,” said Harold.
Brittany leaned in to kiss him, but midway she froze. Her face became ashen.
“What’s wrong Britt,” said Harold?

Brittany’s voice dropped to a whisper, “Victor is in front of the souvenir shop.”

“Impossible, Victor doesn’t…,” something sharp pressed against Harold’s back.
Victor grinned at Brittany and in a calm tone said to Harold, “We’re going to walk to your car. If you try anything, I’ll kill you here and now.”

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23 thoughts on “The trip

  1. Hmmm . . . interesting little flash. It seems more is going on than you are revealing to the reader. I do wish the story was a bit more self-contained, with an actual beginning, middle and end. This seems to have mostly just the middle. Still, its written fairly well. Keep playing along. (Yes, I read that you are referring to characters from previous stories. 🙂 )

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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